Turning Away
While all my secrets lie motionless, I listen to their dreams
Drifting like broken shadows to my end of days
Rolling on into nothingness, where forever seems
To exist in realms that will not pass away
Are not the years long enough, to wake them from their sleep
So I may know the truth my conscience holds inside
Or will my secrets never honor me with all I hope they keep
Until their dreams I no longer listen to or confide
I heard the humming of a spinning wheel, perhaps my own
But the hand that turned the wheel was not mine
I wondered if the dreams of my secrets had all rolled on
To exist in realms my conscience could not find
While all my secrets were motionless, I listened to their dreams
Finding they held all the sorrows I could not see
As I had rolled them into nothingness, where forever seemed
To exist in realms where I did not wish to be
Copyright *Neva Flores @2010
very nice piece... a wonder of steps from dreams into reality
ReplyDeleteVery existential!
ReplyDeleterolling dreams into nothingness - that's great
ReplyDeleteA thoughtful poem that once more stirs my mind and perhaps some secrets too.
ReplyDeleteExtraordinary tapestry Neva. You always weave coherent imagery. There is revelation in each line. I love reading and following where you take us.
ReplyDeleteSo very beautiful.
ReplyDeleteSecrets and dreams are turning me into this beautiful metaphor, but only the truth sets us free.
ReplyDeleteI AM TEMPTED TO SAY ONLY THAT THIS IS ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL--- IT IS, BUT THERE IS SO MUCH DEPTH HERE- SO MANY LAYERS OF MEANING-- SO MANY QUESTIONS , I FIND IT IMPOSSIBLE TO SUM UP IN ONLY A BRIEF OFFHAND OBSERVATION---
ReplyDeleteTO ME THIS EXPRESSES A DEEP YEARNING- TO KNOW, TO UNDERSTAND WHAT IT ALL MEANS-- WHAT LIFE ITSELF IS ALL ABOUT WHAT SECRETS LIE IN THE ATTICS OF OUR MINDS-- WHAT IS THE TRUTH IN OUR DREAMS ?
finding they contain sorrow i rolled them up...nice...
ReplyDeleteNeva, Really like the repetition of the first line in the first and last stanza..."While all my secrets are motionless"....that is a mindful it itself and holds so many different rooms of thought....thank you ...looking forward to the New Year filled with poetry...bkm
ReplyDeleteStunning. I enjoyed this very much ... the pacing, the cadance, the rhythm and repitition. Perfect! Thank you...
ReplyDeleteJamieDedes
this one is a stunner!!
ReplyDeleteGlorious write! :)
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful writing .... particularly likes it.!!! Neva ~~
ReplyDeleteI agree with the comment about the first and last stanzas - really thought provoking
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